Monday 20 April 2020

Splash Planet

Today  I had fun.
I found it challenging to answer the maths questions. 

Next time I would challenge myself with my writing.

Stop we had only just started our trip to….. Splash Planet.

I was going to have so much fun. I was going to go down the biggest slide. But suddenly there were some sirens behind us I was worried I winded down the window my Mum and Dad were going faster now…. I jumped out the window and fell on the road with a thump the police zoomed straight past me with not knowing I was there then my Dad got shot by the police and my Mum got ran over. I was screaming. I nearly flooded the road with my tears. South Africa probably could hear me. But i was actually at Splash Planet I could see the racing cars swishing past me and the bumper Boats splashing me with water. To be continued….
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2 comments:

  1. Anonymous20 April 2020 at 14:48

    I planted some peas,raddish and lettuce.

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  2. Lynne20 April 2020 at 20:37

    Hi Luke,
    I like your story about going to Splash Planet. I like the way you have got sentences of different lengths. It makes your writing exciting. Well done. I will be looking forward to seeing what happens next
    Mrs Thompson

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